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Just as i used to say i love your style. I liked this piece and think it was well written. No crit...can't wait to read more. I think you might ...

Short. So I'm guessing that this vampire leads people into the woods to kill them? I liked the detail but would suggest more so that we can get a mental ...

Disturbing much? Please tell me that she was not immitating what happens between her and her father when he asks her if she wants to play. I mean she talks ...

I'm glad to read more. I couldn't exactly remember what was going on so I had to read the previous chapters to get back into the story. I agree with ...

Ive read all three chapters and have to say that it is interesting and I can't wait to read more. I like Jamie's character...she reminds me of a lot of ...

I'm absolutely loving this. It is really good and caught my attention all the way through. Anyways there are a few confusing spots but not that many, and there are ...

They have pretty much covered it. But what I can personally add in is that not only is it too short, but is sort of choppy if that makes sense. ...

I like it. [quote]You saw it too, I bet[quote/] I would take the I bet part out of it. Other than that there are some punctuation needed in areas. The ...

Very well written. I love how you put spanish into it, though it was kind of weird to add it in the middle like you did. I like the title ...

Let me say first, good job. I think it is nicely written. The only part i didn't get was: Say the floor is made of marble. Just like mer i ...

I enjoyed reading it and yes it does need work. I didnt particurally (can't spell) like the lines: to drown and breathe and drown and then to swim your own ...

I liked the poem. The only thing i see wrong is you didn't use any punctuation. Rhyming poems aren't really my thing but i think you did really well on ...

I enjoyed reading it. I thought your sentences were a little short. It doesn't seemed to be really flowing, it's like you are rushing through it, but maybe that was ...

Hey plutogirl! LOL! Well i thought it had a good meaning and i felt the emotion in it. It's kind of how i've been feeling lately. It seems that we're ...

I liked the poem. There were mistakes, yes but overall i think it was written well. My favorite part was: Sometimes, though, I wish things could have been different That ...